dream

When I go to sleep, I dream of you. I hear your voice, your laugh, and I know I'll wake up soon. I'll tell you I love you, hug you, but you won't say it back and I won't feel the hug. I'll get a call from you and I'll answer, just to wake up in my sweaty sheets, my phone still plugged in, sitting next to the stuffed animal you gave me. 

I rush to sleep every night, and I dream of you over and over again because that's all I want to see. I watch your long hair cascade down your back as you tilt your head back, bathing in the sun. My heart skips a beat and I wake up.

Eventually, the dreams will stop, going back to the normal nightterrors, and I'll forget I ever had any about you. I won't forget about you.

I'll see your mom at the store, I'll say hi, she'll ask me who I am. I'll say my name, and she'll know me as her daughter's ex girlfriend. We'll talk about me and you, about how we would walk at 4 in the morning, run around, and cause trouble. She'll tell me she misses me and ask how my mom's doing.

20 years from now, we'd maybe be married. We'll joke around, dance in the kitchen, and have our own family dinners. I'll tell you all about my dreams, and we'll make so many jokes about them.

Until then, I'll dream of the day. I'll imagine you walking down the aisle, a little flower girl in front of you. I'll dream of your face, of you calling me baby when I'm sick in bed. It'll be enough.

Author's Note

Uhmmm, yeah

Reviews

[Sams]

I really liked this! I think the place where you really shine is how you paint a picture when you write. One thing that did stick out to me was the switching of tenses. In the start of the story, it is consistent, but in the part where the narrator goes to the store, it switches slightly and it sort of threw me off while reading. When the narrator say "I'll", it reads as I will see your mom, and I will tell her my name, and I will talk to her about things the narrator used to do with their ex. Instead, maybe try to stay in the present tense during this scene. That way, it will be clearer for the reader what is happening and it will draw more attention to the part of the story when the narrator is actually speaking in the future tense. I think, overall, this is a really strong start! I can tell from even this super short excerpt of our writing that you are very passionate about your work, and it comes through beautifully! Can't wait to read more of your stuff!

[Elli🦝]

Thank you very much!

[Marie Kinnett]

really good, I love it :)

[Elli🦝]

Thank youuu!

[Marie Kinnett]

I lowkey teared up when I read it

[Elli🦝]

Lmaoo, I'm glad it appealed to the right emotion

[Marie Kinnett]

yea it did :)