the fight

My mind is ragging an unforgotten war between the past and present

My heart is screaming to be heard

But I live in a world where it is only ignored.

My eyes are starting to bleed

From all of the lies that can be seen.

My legs are fighting to go on but the crumble and I fall.

On my knees I am forced to craw.

I can take the pain, I can carry the weight

I can take all you’re your hate.

This is a lost war

My heart is breaking and I can’t take anymore

Victoria Lopez 

Author's Note

im looking for things on context and the flow. can i really consider this a poem since it clearly lacks structure?

Reviews

[JC]

the flow is good because it is natural and your mind, your feelings and emotions, which also makes it poetry...structure does not dictate what is writing, what is poetry, what is art...our thoughts and emotions flow much better naturally than the stunting of form and structure...writing should be a place of abandonment a place for you to lose yourself in what you observe and feel...its a beautiful poem. your heart is screaming to be heart, don't ebb the flow and let it out.

small things...raging, not ragging
crawl not craw
i can take all you're your hate...take out first you're

[Amber Lily]

To answer your question, it has great flow and can easily be considered a poem. Honestly to consider something a poem it just has to be a short write that comes from the soul. Obviously not something written in paragraphs like a story though. What you wrote is perfect for a poem. Structure is pretty basic for poems, if you read some on this site you should get a better idea :)

[Poet]

ragging? 2 sentences have incomplete words? I can take all you’re your hate? Structure is fine. Poem needs work.

[Jeffrey David]

First, i find this very poetic, as you have expressed your feelings with a great deal of emotion. I think a couple of grammar issues are "but they (not the) crumble...", and "forced to crawl (not craw). Very nice write