Go Ask Alice

Chasing the rabbit, he said with a laugh,

It isn't quite the fairy-tale.

I shrugged, and grinned and

swallowed it whole.

Greedy, hungry youth.

I cartwheeled through the tumblers

of every locked thought,

twisting kaleidoscope skies.

Tasting music and dancing 

in the aftermath of euphoria.

Wicked, wonder-filled youth.

You taste of heaven! I screamed

at the world.

Before it turned to hell.

Chaotic bits of history

and hate,

slapped around my innocence and dreams.

I told myself,

The tiger's might is empty!

But I felt the drug peel my skin

away from my soul

and I knew that I lied.

Desperate, ragged youth.

Reviews

[Amorette Duvannes]

This is one of the nicest things I've read on here -- I've read some awfully simpering stuff. This stands out a million times - the imagery, the broadening parallel between beautiful and clichéd, so often abused in the most mediocre of poet's work, has been achieved so wonderfully here. I wish I could compliment you as eloquently as you write -- that last line, particularly, hit home. Wow, though. It must be quite the achievement to be as wonderfully wondrous as your gift. Needless to say, I loved it.

[love, lorey]

Thank you from here to the sky! A lovely review if ever there was one! :) thanks for your time, and for reading, welcome back anytime!

[Scott Metro]

I enjoyed it...an excellent read for a Sunday morning.

Scott

[love, lorey]

Thank you Scott!

[Rob Santana]

A very creative twisted piece of work. I love it!! "Chaotic bits of history and hate" that stanza for whar ever reason grabbed my attention.

[love, lorey]

Thank you :) that is actually one of my favorite lines as well!

[Winter Renee Vineyard]

Omg! I love this! You have a gift!

[love, lorey]

Thank you! What a lovely thing to say! :)

[MsJewel]

I love your use of metaphor and the imagery in your poem. This was a journey and I was captured by every line. Brilliant poetry. You have quite an amazing gift!

:) Julie

[love, lorey]

Thank you, Julie! I very much appreciate you words :)

[I Am Svetlana]

I really loved the imagery in this piece and also the title! There's a book called "Go Ask Alice" that I've never read and doesn't have anything to do with this poem, but just wanted to throw it in there. I was reminded of Alice in Wonderland from the first sentence, but got a completely different story that didn't include her journey. I was close to writing poem about Alice in Wonderland, but didn't get very far. I love the deeper message in this poem as it says that the world really isn't what we expect it to be. I loved this piece...

[love, lorey]

Thanks girl! I'm an Alice addict lol The title is a line from a song I love, but now I feel like I need to find the book!

[I Am Svetlana]

I've been meaning to find the book, but always kept forgetting whenever I am at the bookstore! Partially cause I don't quite know the authors name...but I will sometime soon! And if I read it before you, I'll be sure to let you know how it is :)

[love, lorey]

Awesome, please do!

[I Am Svetlana]

Will do :) trust me.

[love, lorey]

:D:D sweet!

[Glenn McCrary]

Forgot to rate lol so here is your rating.

[Glenn McCrary]

This poem quite cleverly documents a seemingly borderline insanity but that's a good thing for writers such as you and I. I loved the imagery and symbolism carried throughout the entire poem. I especially was grateful for the joy that the line "twisting kaleidoscope skies" composed with the gentle window of my soul.

[love, lorey]

:D thanks Glenn! I really appreciate it, yours is one in this field that I truly respect, so thanks for taking the time to come here and read this jumble of thoughts :)

[Glenn McCrary]

You're absolutely welcome. :)

[Ruth]

Oh, this is magnificent! Took me on a journey, pleased to meet you :) x

[love, lorey]

A lovely review from someone so talented! Thanks!

[Ruth]

My pleasure! x

[R. L. Hill]

This is great! I loved the visuals presented and how you progressed through the essence of youth. Well done.

[love, lorey]

Thanks so much! I truly appreciate it!