Storm

The sea is smooth as glass tonight

the stars and the moon shine so bright

But I know a storm's coming

A shooting star lights the sky,

but lightning flashes in your eyes.

Your voice as you wish is light and laughing,

but deep beneath thunder is blasting.

Our hands are entwined,

but I know that hand will make me cry.

The bruises are healed,

but the scars on my heart are concealed.

My summer's been filled with more storm than sun,

You've been causing me more pain than love.

I want to leave, but I can't go,

all I hope for is that winter has no snow.

Author's Note

first poem in a while, does it suck?
reviews please!

Reviews

[Odayin]

Not your best, but still written very well Sophie.
I like the idea, and I thought you displayed it nicely...as usual.
I kinda missed your poems, so this was a nice return.
I lees my enjoyed how you included multiple factors of a storm and it was unique to include your reasoning for writing this, I liked it.
Nicely written, nice idea, you know to keep it up

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

I enjoyed this very much!

[A.C. Davis]

This does NOT suck, very good Sofie :)

[Rob Santana]

Does not suck at all. Nicely written,how can it suck when writings come from the heart? never think your writings suck.

[Sophie]

Thank you :D

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Absolutely not! Don't believe anything you pen could ever possibly suck!

[Mazie Tackett]

No It doesn't suck. You made a beautiful spin of imagery while maintaining flow. You also threw in a couple rhymes here and there that kept my childish mind interested.

[Destinyxi]

It might be best to get up and go. Not all wounds heal, never forget that.

Good write! Doesn't suck at all

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the internal struggle in the poem. Hard to swim in pain and pleasure. Sometime we will. Good emotion and questions raised in the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Lydia]

'Tis does not suck! 'Tis is divine!
Why am I talking like this?

[Jamar Saunders]

awesome poem . the last line made it stick out more