Breathe in, Breath Out

kind of... angry.

I won't breathe in

breathe out,

because I have nothing left to shout.

The world can fly into the sun for all I care,

because this very world has left my emotions bare.

It ripped down my walls,

while simultaneously building them up,

the world can end on December 21^st, I don't mind,

I really don't give a f**k.

Sure, it'd be great for all the children to live,

but what about all of the rest of us?

Who's lives have been pummeled and ground to dust.

Life just really sucks,

it's funny, because life sucks the life out of you,

and punches you in the gut until you're bleeding through.

Knocks out your teeth,

and stabs you in the back,

and puts your loved one's hands on the handle,

and laughs while watching them twist it

and smashed your head to the pavement with a crack.

Author's Note

I'm honestly not mad right now, but apparently my subconscious has other ideas.
reviews please!

Reviews

[Odayin]

Well, I don't know if it's because I haven't read in so long of what, but I have to say that this is definitely one of my lesser liked ones from you. It definitely displayed your emotion nicely but it seemed so emtpy in other matters. It just seemed really sloppy for you. One of your styles, but I've read some of the most beautiful things from you, and this style hardly ever produces them. Sorry I'm being so critical...but I'm not going to lie. And when I read the others in a few minutes, I can already tell I'll be honest there too

[Sophie]

it was more a of a rant than a poem and I wasn't even mad it was weird, but as I kept writing I kept getting madder it was weird

[Odayin]

Well, at least you're releasing your "not madness" on something like this:)

[Coyote Poetry]

Interesting thoughts in the poem. I believe when the world ends. Will be long and painful. Like a "Mad Max" movie from the 1970. No kindness in the poem except for the children. Sad part of man's madness. Children will pay for our sins and mistakes. Than you for sharing a very good poem. Open the door to questions and thoughts.
Coyote

[soliloquy]

I like the terrific point you make about 'the rest of us'.......its so true about the young ones needing to continue....but life can be a real b***h for the rest of us who are living it! :0)

[CH Archive]

Once again the personal approach you place in all of these poems is what makes it stick out.

[Lydia]

I likes it, too!

[afra]

great write

[The Fallen]

I can feel the anger, and emotions within this poem, Very well written

[Amanda]

I like it, nice job.