Hopeless

been slowly working on this, finally got the inspiration to finish it :D

All we are is skin and bone

sewn together with threads of hope

But when love comes along in the form of a knife

All of our hope is cut from our life.

Leaving us a pile of bone and skin

and hope leaving us to lust after sin.

And once the sin is found,

because of our loss of hope, we'll jump and drown.

But because of our sin, we're not allowed what we want,

and we'll be rescued, and our lost hope will still haunt.

We'll be forced to live a nightmare,

a reality instead of a dream, no where to go, no where.

So here's the lesson kids,

take it to heart,

Don't fall in love,

it just hurts so damn much.

Author's Note

reviews please :P

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You have a amazing mind. Travel in many directions. I enjoyed this poem. Open the door to thoughts.
"We'll be forced to live a nightmare,
a reality instead of a dream, no where to go, no where."
I believe we decide our journey good or bad. If you take the good road. Better chance of knowing happiness. I like the strong ending. Good to end with advice. Thank you for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

[Falling Leaf.]

Buongiorno,

The only grammatical thing that I noticed is no where should be nowhere. Other than that, this was fantastic--although I wasn't big on the message at the end. Nevertheless a great write.

Arrivederci!

[anxia]

Love the first two stanza Thats creative!

[Rorenzu]

Not necessarily my friend. Love is something that is wonderful. Remember it is in the love we were able to produce skin and bones. It lies in the person how he/she handles the thing called love:)

[Sophie]

Thanks :)
I don't write my poetry based on personal experience, I honestly think love is one of the only good things in the world, though i've never experienced it, this is just what I got inspiration for. Thanks for your review!

[AleyshaRosa]

Awesome, Sophie. Interestingly enough, I didn't actually get the lesson until the last stanza =p

Good work
Koodoos

[Abbie]

wonderful poem sophie, I love it! keep it up! :)