Schizophrenic

Um... idk.

Asleep in bed,

my dreams

disturbed my murmurs

fingers claw at the bed seams.

I awake to a scream, a shriek,

it is my own,

for the monsters have found what they seek.

I calm down.

I don't see them.

Where are the creatures

whose whispers haunt my mind,

I close my eyes.

There! There they are!

Behind my closed eyes,

that is where the monsters reside.

Gruesome, bloody...

me, that is that I see.

They laugh, they tell me things,

tell me what to do.

They tell me if I listen,

they'll go away.

Their reflective eyes glisten

in light behind my lids.

Do it, do it now,

and this fear will leave,

Do it, do it now,

let the monsters win.

And then we'll leave.

I obey, and pick up the gun,

as I pull the trigger I hear one last thing:

naïve,

don't you know not to listen to me?

Author's Note

just kind of came to me, but not my favorite. Reviews please :)

Reviews

[shawlyn]

Hi Sophie,
It may not be your favourite, but it is a very strong and compelling poem. For one so young, you show a good deal of insight into the mind of a disturbed person. Your last lines definitely are very chilling, but a brilliant way to finish the poem as well as the character. Keep it up.
Regards
Shawlyn

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good story in the poem. I like the way you create a desperate situation with a bad ending. Thank you for the outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Abigail]

Oh wow... such a powerful poem. It gave me chills... The very last 2 lines are just repeating in my head.

[Archia]

I love this one, it's very gripping, and the end is just perfect. Quite creepy. I love that word 'naive' just that one word, it says so much. There's just one tiny thing "me, that is that I see." The second 'that' I think is meant to be something else, but I couldn't figure out exactly what.
I like the voices, I'm not really sure what else to call them, they're very ominous.Brilliant poem.

[Virtuosa X]

Great job! I was not expecting this ending.
Nice!!!

[Lumière Dé..]

AMAZING. That is all...

[Owlgirl]

Wow, powerful writing, great job! Love the word choices adn amazing story!

[Amanda]

SOmeone's on a gruesome/murder story roll today ;)

[Odayin]

I don't know where you're acquiring these guns from...
But altogether this was a nice story, good meaning. I feel like everybody can relate haha

[Lacha Young]

It sounds like they're tooken over your mind and you was too tired to wake up and open your eyes. its like a wild jungle story sort of

[Wild Willow Blue]

This has a very powerful meaning behind it. I love the way you describe this disease, and they way you end the character's life. The imagery is great, and I felt like I was the character struggling with this.