You Lost Me

inspired by Christina Aguilera's You Lost Me

Wandering alone amongst the trees

the branches drooping, rotting,

the color scheme consisting of black and dark green

my wounds drip blood, just clotting.

I sit on the earth,

and a puff of dust clouds

in this place, death, and the absence of mirth,

Miseries crowd.

I can't breath,

They're choking me.

My sobs rip from my throat,

I'm lost, all alone here, in this forest remote

I'm reminded of their warnings,

they said to tell you goodbye,

now, I won't see morning,

you've left me here to die.

My hair, once beautifully done,

is now scraggly and tangled.

My dress had begun

as perfect, now it is mangled.

My make up stains my face

but so does mud,

I will survive this place,

I will spill your blood.

Don't beg for me back,

after you sent me there,

I'm not going to give you anymore slack,

depression is not a fun affair.

Author's Note

reviews please!
and if you haven't, please just read PLEASE! it's not even a sentence, long, and it'll take a second of your time, and will reward you with 3 reviews :D

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The description was direct and painful. I like the visions create by powerful statements.
"Don't beg for me back,
after you sent me there,
I'm not going to give you anymore slack,
depression is not a fun affair."
Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Virtuosa X]

This had me wondering quite a few things, tickles my brain.
It also made me thing of "The Hunger games", life in the arena
Nice work

[Owlgirl]

Great job! Very well written! Exceptional!

[Archia]

I enjoyed the strength that came across in this piece, it was like it was me sitting there sobbing. Really it was the strength and imagery that did that. This was a good poem. It all seems to be building up to that last line and it came through nicely there.

[Olive Belikov]

this is soo good i love all the imagry. especially like the lines:
I'm reminded of their warnings,
they said to tell you goodbye,
now, I won't see morning,
you've left me here to die.
really great poem, keep writing sweetie !

[Sophie]

Those are my favorite lines too!

[Emrick]

depression is not a fun affair indeed. you have matured in poetry these days,you get to your points nicely.

[Destinyxi]

I can't resist, one small typo:

I can't breath,
They're choking me.

Breath should be Breathe with an E. Breath is someones breath, breathe is to yknow, breathe haha.

Really nice poem Sophie. I'm always surprised to read your poems and see how good they are, I don't think I was writing that well when I was 14.

[Odayin]

Great imagery and relation of the changes. This poem was just really nicely written. Great job Sophie. (sorry, couldn't really think of a novelish review, this is just really nice)

[shawlyn]

Hi Sophie,
Your imagery is very strong, dark and emotional. I agree with Marble Mountain in regards to the fifth stanza, last line, but overall, a well crafted poem.
Regards
Shawlyn

[Wild Willow Blue]

Very well worded; the flow is perfect. I love the imagery you are able to portray here. Nice.