Like A Moth

As I walk into the party I get a wink from a guy

He's dressed like the bad boy type

Girls flock around him like moths to the only light in the night

The smirk on his face says "you'll be one of these girls one day"

I roll my eyes and walk off with a little extra attitude

Just maybe I'll make him act like a moth tonight

 

As I dance with a boy I met on the balcony I get a stare from that bad boy

He's looking at me with teasingly flirty eyes

The girls around him grind and dance around him

The look on his face says "come over here"

I smirk and wink as I turn away and continue dancing

I know I can make him act like a moth tonight

 

As I sit on the couch alone I catch sight of bad boy coming my way

His white T-shirt making his muscles show irrisistable and tempting

The girls follow behind him closely and giggling

The look on his face says "you've got my full attention"

I bite my lower lip and look him in the eyes

I knew I could turn the light into a moth tonight

 

As we sit and flirt I start to actually become interested in this bad boy

His smile makes me smile and his voice is hypnotizing

The girls are no longer around him

The look on his face says "don't screw this up boy"

I might just give him my number

Looks like we both were turned to moths tonight

 

Reviews

[cheeeeese]

I love how it was a story, just in this form. It was very easy to be sucked into this piece because, first of all it's like a story, and second, you just wrote it that good. I love your comparison with moths also, although I found it strange, I guess it fit well. Very enjoyable piece. Loved it

[Holly-Marie]

Brilliant! What a wonderful story. I really loved it. It was very well written.

[Zombeh]

I don't know how to describe this, I...I just thought that this piece was brilliant. Love the comparison, the way you wrote it... keep it up! :)

[Kon™]

Creative piece, and interesting way to make a story in this form. This is something I haven't seen ever, very unique. You comparison is great. Very likeable and enjoyable piece to read, great job! :)

[Aussie]

I love the comparison of human attraction to moths to light. Very creative.
This was well crafted,and simply absorbs you. It makes you feel that you're IN the situation. This has fantastic imagery and I loved the choice of words.
Great work(:

[Amethyst Wave]

I like how you write, you kept me interested through the whole thing. Most poems bore me and I never finish a whole thing. Nice story, I wouldn't think of relating people to a moth. Yet, it works.

[celyn]

Awesome ending.. nice metaphor, moth to the light.
I really enjoyed reading this :)
A great write.

[Amy]

i actuly say the story happening in my head awsom stuff

[ebur™]

ha, great story in poetic form. i enjoyed reading this alot, in fact it was a bit humorous at times. i liked how you referred everything to a month and a light at night, that was creative. i could actually imagine this story rolling in my head like a film, very stunning i might add. I'd have to say, this is one of my faves. keep it up! :)

[Kenny L. Mitchell]

I like this. Visual imagery is quite stunning and illuminating. Sweet!