Helpless

     I can't honestly say I've ever liked her all that much, though I do admit to admiring her in almost every aspect, she is strong in her own way, self motivated, beautiful, and she somehow makes everything work out; the opposite of me basically. Though, I never thought I would see her like this... I almost couldn't hide the shock on my face when he helped her up the stairs; she was too weak to even make it up the stairs. I thought that was the extent of the help she would need, before I saw her that is, but one look and I knew she could hardly life her own hands without assistance. Her skin was pale, like an off white marble color, and looked like there was simply no blood left in her body. It looked like it was melting off of her body, or perhaps like it was a loose second skin, only there to hide her real, perfect skin. The look on her face was a mixture of pain and helplessness, the woman who has so much pride, reduced to fraility and pain, no matter how temporary.

Reviews

[Carolyn]

this is such a short story however maybe that is because it doesn't matter you have been able to write such a powerful story within a short amount of words. that is a truly a gift many people struggle with not being able to shorten their stories where it seems you have mastered that ability :) congratulations

[QuietPoet]

This was sad. It started out like youu hated the woman, but then you felt bad for her after you saw her suffering. I liked this.

[Rain Kissed Secret]

You know what I said, but I'm gonna write it here anyway.
It has a lot of contradictions, not as precise. Very observing. I like it. It may be odd but it adds to it. I feel with this piece.
Really really sad. Pity for the girl. Relating in a way.
I look at it and see you being in a glitch in time, seeing her only in that way whenever you pass her. That you only see her weakness but you know her strengths.
very good job
Rain