Come On In...

Azure blue eyes of sin,

wicked grin...

sky spinning endless, reflected in the whirlpool--

 

come on in. 

 

 

        All the better to see you with, my dear--

 

brown hair, waves of velvet chocolate

Azure eyes of deepest grin,

 

come on it.

 

 

 

 

 

Wicked sin.

Reviews

[Melanie Jane Boicourt S..]

Wow! That is brilliant. I love the word choice and the way you set up your writing. It flows so nicely and paint the picture that you are portaying in such an original way.
Love All, Mejasha

[JC Fox]

I LOVED this poem it was sensual and the images were beautiful.

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Oh my, I have a poem called 'Come on In' as well that was recently posted - how the Universe works - although they are different in content - I enjoyed this read - a sensual, naughtiness to this piece. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Emily B]

Yes, I think so, different than I expected. . .

[mattavelli]

I don't think i trust you. I'm a liitle creeped out. :)
This is great. It's very different.
Take care.

[Rod Zinkel]

With the first three lines I was expecting "come on in... the water' fine," as a whirlpool can also be seductive. But the "All the better to see you with" is a good, quick reference to set the tone. I take it the second to last line would be "come on in."

[The Musings of Mary H.]

Seductive...I love your discriptive use of color in this poem! Great work!