Rose

The gentle breeze fulfilled her lungs,

As sunshine does to a petal.

Somedays I’m the flower in soil,

Others I’m rain upon metal.

Author's Note

I'm always up and open for feedback! Please feel free to comment.

Reviews

[Stu. T.H.]

I interpreted it as a description of one's mentality.
The use of soft language and gentle mental images mix nicely together to create a laid-back ambience.
That, with the contrast between the two moods mentioned as "flower in soil" which I presumed to signify one's resilience and ability to overcome challenges, and the other as "rain upon metal" signifying faith in oneself being able to pull through any obstacles to reach their desired end, the work has itself a powerful tone to it underneath the gentleness in which it expressed itself. And roses, are known for their impeccable belief and instances of resilience, among the few flowers armed with thorns, do embody all such qualities.
As may humans do.
This is a great work to read and one worth revisiting in the future.

[Adele]

Thank you! I throughly enjoyed your interpretation! We have very similar mindsets on my poem :)

[Kim S.]

I really enjoyed this, it is really good

[Chris]

I like the word choices, gives a fair mind pic of the author.

[Matthew Kult]

Poetically creative.

Lovely read

With love,

Matthew

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

You have a way with words
I love it