A Kiss and A Tear

A kiss and a tear,

Love is like a dare,

You may think you are the perfect pair,

But you are just unaware,

Love and sadness,

Is just a complicated affair,

Sadness or joy you both might not share,

In the end you might become solitaire,

Roses and frowns,

Your love says "I don't like you, I declare!"

So from 'perfect' love you should beware,

Because your relationship you can't repair,

Back to friends,

Love, sometimes a deadly trap, had you in its false care,

You think "Life is so, so unfair!"

As you die alone in your death chair.

Author's Note

Hello everyone! Tell me if you think its to philosophical, or something. Thanks!

Reviews

[onmyway]

I loved the title and how you begin with "You may think you are the perfect pair,
But you are just unaware" - the poem pretty well sums up most of the complications of life.. Life IS unfair, but to me that's fair enough!! ;)

[lydie]

Sorry that I took too long to review. Something was wrong with my computer. Anyway, Thanks for the review!

[Terpsichore]

I've read most of your stuff; if you really are ten, (and I have two grand kids who are,) then JK Rowling had better look out, because your understanding and complex use of language is exceptional for a child. If you're not the kid you claim to be, then why pretend? T

PS. Sorry if I offend, but the anonymous internet has a way of pissing me off.

[lydie]

Um thank you for the compliment, but I actually am 10 years old. I wish JK Rowling knew me. I love her Harry Potter books. My favorite was the Chamber of Secrets. By the way, if I wasn't ten, why would I lie?

[lydie]

Oh and also, no offense taken. :D

[Iris]

You think "Life is so, so unfair!"
As you die alone in your death chair.
I liked it a lot. Are you open to suggestions? If so, then that line:
"It is a complicated affair"
could be turned into:
"Is just a complicated affair".
For no exact reason, really, except I think it goes better with the flow of the poem.

[lydie]

Thank you for the suggestion. Yes, I think your right about how it goes with the flow. I will change it right now. Very smart!

[B]

An extremely witty write
Love doesnt work in tears
and it never works to love someone then become a friend
so we are left with one decision to make
To say
I will not cry
because love knows no tears

[lydie]

Very good wording, and thanks for reviewing.

[Emily]

Great idea for a poem!
Well done!
Keep on writing!

[lydie]

Thanks for the support.