The Iron Dragon

... I don't really know what this is about... *Updated!* now with less errors

A fresh metallic scent ambush;

Groaning, twisting alloy structure.

Waves of solder grooves

Meander across the

Beast's magnetic hide.

A bronze and platinum finish

Splatter painted with our

Gold ideas and

Silver thoughts.

Burning cold to the touch;

Vast sheets of glistening

Iron cover the mental Dragon,

Invoking solitary thoughts.

Jaws fall open;

Spewing icy flames,

Paving the way for

Lost and found dreams.

Author's Note

I wrote and edited this at 2 in the morning, so keep that in mind when pointing out errors/suggestions.
*But please still feel free do point them out*

Reviews

[JC]

this gave me an image of a twisting metal dragon but also of a metaphor for the things people say and a burning loneliness...or maybe it's just late and my mind is racing...either way, enjoyed this.

[J Todd Underhill]

Wow, I love it! I host a radio show based in Lakewood Colorado dedicated to poetry and spoken word art, which I would love to have you call and maybe as a guest. to learn more check www.worldpoetryopenmic.net!

[Charley]

Wow, thanks! I guess you really liked my poem, huh? That's awesome! I'll look into it!