Oakvale

Short and sappy, good for the hopeless romantic types

Golden ocean, of straw
I see you resting �" eternity, soft and perfect
Caressed by dawn’s warm glory
Blending with the sun above
And land below
Like a painting, nestled in
The glow of your soft, petal like skin

Reviews

[aedaba]

I like this. It's says so much in so little, so very niiice detail!!

[Terrestrial.42]

Aww, this is really sweet... I like the line "eternity, soft and perfect" best.

The last line, I think you'd probably want to write "petal-like". Otherwise, everything's really well-written -- the metaphors are touching. :)