Be Yourself

I was frustrated with someone and wrote this poem...

You annoy me sometimes,
And you need to be yourself.
You copy me and that makes me tick.
So quit it.

It is my vital pet peave
And you aren't helping.
I'm working on my offense,
So you need to work on yours.

I try to understand you,
But you're too confusing.
You are way to straight forward,
And you need to worry more about yourself.

I will forgive you,
If you are willing to repent.
Even if you think it's no big deal
It is; because it's so obvious, you don't realize.

I know you have been a good friend to me,
But this is too much.
I'm angry and I'm trying to hold it in.
And when I'm famous,
I know you will still be there.

I love you anyway,
But you taking my ideas is annoying.
Be yourself,
And I will let it go.

Author's Note

Just tell me the grammar problem...

Reviews

[fireblossom]

I laughed with joy while reading this poem. It is from the heart of a sincere 13 year old and that is a wonderful thing. The poem is honest and authentic. It is you... I will forgive you if you are willing to repent... that is so truehearted and wise. I am quite proud of you for writing a poem that shows the real issues facing friends of any age while also calling for peace and reconciliation. Well done Mandi.

[Bud]

Excellent!

"You are way to straight forward" the to in this needs to be "too". A minor that we all make sometimes. : >)

This is an Outstanding piece that was most enjoyable reading. I love how you are encouraging your friend to be themselves, and make their own mark in this life. And the fact that even though you are scolding them for there error, you are willing to keep them in your life...even once you reach your destined fame! Shows your humanity and willingness to be a true friend! Keep up the Wonderful works of art!

[Raef C. Boylan]

"And when I'm famous,
I know you will still be there." - Let's applaud the 13-year old ego

"I try to understand you,
But you're too confusing.
You are way to straight forward" - this made me think two things:

1) "you're too confusing" and "you're way too straight forward" seems like a direct contradiction to me; by straight-forward do you mean simple [which is kind of how it reads] or more like straight-talking, blunt?

2) If they're straight-forward, doesn't that imply that they're already being themselves?

Anyway, your style is conversational and reflective, which is pleasant to read.


Grammar

"It is my vital pet peave" [peeve]

"You are way to straight forward" [to = too]

Good to see such a young writer making use of the semi colon.

p.s. re: your bio, the 'dots' are called ellipses. I was excited when I found out they had a name; maybe you will be too.

[SimplyLove50]

Oh! I love that! Good job! Oh, and thanks!

[Ben]

I didn't see any grammar mistakes either. I really like this! Good job!

[Nancy Lee Shrader]

Good ticked off write.

I didn't see any grammar problems, but I do wish I had paid more attention in English class. LOL