alone

you leave me in the dark
alone, waiting
though i cant see
i dont need light to hear
the sound of you
leaving me

Reviews

[SheActsLikeSummer]

This was excellent. I can really feel the emotion. I enjoyed how it was short; concise but I don't know... maybe you could tell us what the sound is. Heavy footstep, clacking heels? I don't know. I just think that would add another level to the poem, make us feel more for the 'i' in the poem because of what it symbolizes.

[Admiral Kirk]

This is so sad... I am very familiar with the feeling of being left in the dark for a long, long time... And it feels like the mood of this poem. Nicely done.

[amanda]

thx :)

[Skye]

Nicely written, the last two lines really had a big impact.

[....]

Such a powerful read, enjoyed

[roxy]

I agree great visualization!

[Alex Davis]

the visualization in this is powerful, especially for the size. Youve done a good job of extracting a lot of feeling out of few words and I love it.