Hold My Hand

a friend's hand is always welcome

 

Shimmering strands of light

float down from the moon this night.

I'm all alone, out to roam,

hear whispers and a soft moan.

 

The bare branches of the trees

seem like evil threatening me.

The air is bursting with tension,

building up my apprehension.

 

The shrieking howl of a cat

sends shivers up my back.

Breathless feelings of fear,

wondering who is near.

 

As I creep along this path,

wishing for courage i don't have.

Out of the shadow steps a man,

saying, hold my hand, just hold my hand.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Andrew N. Farrens]

"The bare branches of the trees
seem like evil threatening me."

I have always felt that some old trees are malicious in nature, looking to do harm to any innocent person who comes across them. It is even more disconcerting to be in a forest of such trees.....
Great poem! A perfect example of good writing.........
Indeed.

ANF

100/100

[mandy]

andrew, thank you so much...glad you enjoyed it!

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree with the ending. In a dark place. The safety of a hand is welcomed. I like how you led to the every good ending. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Jack Strickland]

Great Poem Mandy, love reading your poems

[Sami Khalil]

Well written and conveyed...Thank you for sharing...:)...............

[Ose Mountain]

Nicly done. Reminds me of my "Enchanted Forest". But there was no releif but to get to the othere side and far away each time I traveled through..

[An owl on the moon]

There is such an atmosphere of night in shadows... the lonely walk within the barren place... and then one who moves into the scene even as light itself. Beautiful write.

[mandy]

thank you.

[Trini]

I like the twist. I like the way you describe a dark scary place and transform the setting to include peace and comfort in just one line. Excellent job!

[mandy]

thank you trini. that is exactly what i was trying to do..i could have continued n with another verse explaining the change, but thought that line said it all..thank you.

[Enid Blake]

This had a surprise ending. From the scene you set in the beginning of the poem and right up to those final lines, I imagined something awful was going to happen! Good unexpected twist :)

[TheLastEclipse]

And when that old man stepped out from the shadows I about near peed myself xD

No, in all seriousness, this was a great write hidden in simplicity. I enjoyed it very much. A lot of people surprise me at how they can make the shortest poems so great and descriptive. For its style and the self-pleasing nature of itself I will have to give this poem a very satisfactory 100 :D

[mandy]

thank you so much! i had to laugh at your little addition. i love to see a little funny myself!

[The Random Writings Of ..]

This does indeed have an eerie feeling to it, and the vivid imagery that you have penned is sends shivers down my back. The piece flows with excellence! And the ending is a reassuring hope that in the midst of darkness and fear that someone will be there to guide us and take our hands. Dark, yet reassuring. Thank you for sharing :)

[mandy]

thank you. you got it exactly!

[The Random Writings Of Me..Kates]

You are welcome :)