The Code of Cleopatra

First light comes with grandeur promise

Eastern wind blows with fragrance of lily

                      Be stupor to the compelling sounds of the river Nile

Relish the softness of my Egyptian silk

Your regal mightiness covers my sinuous bare body

Invades my senses with your tempest aroma

                     Forest green soft fabric covering your sword

I want to lie down with you to savor the sweetness of  honey

                 Soak deeply your soul into the ceaseless milk

Conquer my abode, seize my spirit.

     

Lock with mine your universe that is eternally embedded in my core

Author's Note

Reviews

[SM Davis]

This is very interesting. I don't think I've ever seen stupor used as an adjective (rather than a noun). The various fonts and colors are not clearly resonated here and left me a bit confused. The imagery is impeccable. The last line is GENIUS!!! WEll done.

[Mike Emil]

ehh, women and snakes
old story
that pic reminds me of an old girlfriend
women can conquor octopuses if they have a mind to

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

lol :) you are always right Mike :)

[icelandicblue]

I enjoy your poems of antiquity. Cleopatra's legacy is bigger than the time she spent on this earth. Your poem incorporates Egyptian images that add to the mystique of this intriguing woman.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Ice, I am glad you enjoy this piece. I love Egyptian story that is why I wrote this poem to explore the richness of their culture.

[francis]

love your use of words.keep it up

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Francis, thanks for reading my work Bro.

[Frieda P]

Ahh the temptress Cleopatra, powerful and seductive. Did you know that she was a writer, she wrote a medical treatise called, Cosmetics. I think she would have approved of the light you shone on her, very compelling....lovely Marc.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Lol :) thanks Frie, you word is always an inspiration to me. Yeah I read about her work in cosmetics :) and I am always fascinated with her.

[Frieda P]

Ha, you and every other red-blooded man in the universe, my pleasure. :-)

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

hehehe :) Thanks Frie

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Some lovely lines in this one Marc. It speaks like a tale of an ancient romamce which of course it was. Didn't like the typeface changes though as they did not enhance the poem. The graphic was good.
I would make minor changes:
Stupor to the compelling sounds of the Nile
Lavish the softness of my Egyptian silk
Your regal mightiness covers my sinuous bare body
and
Conquer my heart, seize my spirit.
Lock your universe that's embedded into my core

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. John I consider your suggestion :) thank a lot. thank for your time reading my work.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Thanks Mr. John I consider your suggestion :) thanks a lot. thank you for your time reading my work.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

No problems Marc your work is always worth reading!

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

:) Thanks again Sir John.

[Marc Marlon Villaflor]

Hi guys, want an honest review :) please, you are free to break me or build me from your heart. Thanks!