Forty Two'ed

For Helena's Blue Rose "Tovli's Ten" contest

 PERFUME of your soul--                            
 SPLENDID in its role!
                                
 It's PRESENCE has defined                       
 OBLIVION in my mind.

 No PURER lesson taught
 Thy looking-GLASS sought
                     
 From my heart's SKY;                                 
 SERENE, I softly sigh!
                                
 We TWO, waxing versiful                       
 Thank God, ever MERCIFUL!                     

Author's Note

Well, to be honest, I liked the 49 word version a lot better! This feels rather choppy to me, but...We do what we must!

Reviews

[Marie]

This is a good use of these words, and I admire your rhyming. I have not found the time to enter this contest yet, but I know it would be challenging.

[Sheila Kline]

It is indeed difficult to combine ten words as this within a 40 word poem, but you have done it my friend, and I must say it has resulted in an artfully crafted read!