"I-It's Okay. I Just Needed Someone Right Now."

The earliest I can recall being hurt by my mother was in 7th or 8th grade

I didn't take care of my responsibilities therefore something had to be paid

Fifteen minutes before she left for work

My eyes were glued to the computer as if I was some desk clerk

She left and I phoned my close friend at the time

The way to the phone felt like a long climb

I bawled and bawled

What I said, I can't recall...

"I'm so sorry... I-I don't know what to say..."

I didn't need consoling in my moment of wanting to run away

I just needed someone to know

about the day that I've let go

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Memories are funny. We look back and learn regret and sadness. This is a sad poem. You gave little information on the situation. Lessons are learn daily. Sometimes we can't run. We must reach a understanding. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Antoñyo]

A very interesting and thought-provoking piece, as one can see in the comments...
This is why I love writing in general; it is the single most useful tool in both growing and learning and these two things transfer the same to the masses when shared.
I hate that I've lost all of the work of my youth...it was therapeutic and like this; thoughts and feeling spilled onto paper. So glad generations that followed can press "save" nowadays

Thanks for sharing

[SteveB]

I enjoyed the conversational style although at certain times it seemed to interfere with the rhyme scheme you set up. The uneven line lengths created an unever meter throwing off the rhyme at times.
Strong imagery, great conversational flow.
I look forward to reading more of your work.

[Einstein Noodle]

i like this a lot. great job, thinks i
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[h d e rushin]

you're conversational style is so refreshing. I love you hear you speak......dana

[Harmonia Chimera]

Yes! That's exactly it. Sometimes, we don't need consolation and we don't need words, and we don't need help or advice. We just need someone to know. We need someone to say, "I know, it hurts. But don't do anything stupid, and soon, it'll pass." I love how you managed to describe all that in a few simple words.

[Shhhh]

This is a beautiful poem. You can definitely feel the emotion you felt in such a terrible situation and you painted the scene very nicely. Keep writing.