I know I have A Problem

I worship this high.
I need pills, sweetheart,
To blink white, brown, tears on my powdery face.
Love to wake with junkie
Girls -
Love their dirty ways and needles
For eyes.
The smell of dead sex-
Filled air lurks and smothers
My dilated heart.
The bleak mirror
Claws forth a cracked corpse, pulsing,
Mutated. Soaked -
I wake up rigid and lonely.
There are no more days left -
So I thank my pusher. I live and die once more.

Reviews

[Kristallo]

You have such a direct and sinister way of commanding attention, and comprehension, from your reader with a coy and edgy sort of eloquence that I could never hope to harness. You are a beautiful disaster, my dear, and I never neglect my refuge of tantalizing retreat into the careful words that shadow my heart, all of them strung by you and enrapturing me. It's fascinating, really.

I wake up rigid and lonely.
There are no more days left -
So I thank my pusher and die once more.

If there was ever a better ending to a poem, I don't know of it. Bravo.

[Rosalind Gale]

-xxxxxxxxx-

[Corset]

I'm so glad you decided to go ahead and publish these, it is sometimes good to see that our heros can be very human, it makes our own faults more bearable, that is selfish I know, but no less true :P

[Dr. Wood ?]

yeah, I see what you mean....you're in a dark place....Skilled as ever but very bleak

[Lina Grey]

Yes that is a problem. I like how clear and direct this is, no beating around the bush. It's got a dark, almost disgusting chill to it, and it's sad and hopeless and kinda careless. I don't know a better way to describe the feeling, but it's basically the protagonist is saying "I have this problem, and even though I know it's a problem it's too late to fix it so I don't care I'm going to enjoy it through to the end." A very powerful piece. Thank you.

[Rosalind Gale]

Lina, you are absolutely right; your view on the protagonist is exactly what I was going for. Thank you so much for your review:
-x-

[eglantine]

"my dilated heart" wonderful! You are def a great writer. I've enjoyed your writing. Thanks for sharing. Perhaps try playing around with teh structure on this one? I feel you could have a lot of fun with it and bring out the under-nail of the poem.

[Coyote Poetry]

The poem is hard and direct. Easy to fall on the road to survive on drugs and emotion. Hard to get off the road to a dead end. I like the complete poem. A strong ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote