Shine

So I just sat there.

 Looking at the perfectly painted sky change

 from reds and oranges

 to indigos, and blacks.

 

 I watched the stars come out from their hiding spots to shine.

I think people are like that too.

 Coming out of hiding,

 and shining brighter than they or anyone else thought they could.

 

MC

 

 

Reviews

[kidstone]

The brevity of your piece suits the revelation of this beautiful moment perfectly. I think the prose format does'nt do it much good though. Structured as a poem, each line would have a more lasting impact.

[Mary]

I tried out the poem format, and I love it thank you.

[Trigorin]

You have some good description here, but this is brief in the extreme. I feel like you ought to expand this more and turn it into an actual story. As it stands, it's good writing, but there's really no depth to it.