Only Wanted to Know

what if all the ancient statues in Italy were once people, punished by the old gods?

Spare this life
only wanted to know,
why is the sunlight so warm and bright ?
while beneath the rich soil,
hidden doorways to Hades below...

Tremors and sea spray
jelly fish and decay,
only wanted to know
the reasons why,
What differentiates,
between you and I...

Stepped past my boundaries
Blood fuses into marbled stone,
Cemented for eternity
in this city square,
I am all alone...

Mathiasthom
written 2/24/08

Reviews

[FlaLover]

thought provoking and clever

[Paul Bell]

I suppose if you become a statue at the end of your life. You must have done something in life to deserve the honour. Though all statues look lonely.

[Mererid]

A striking piece, very nice imagery. IMHO I think there's scope to flesh it out some more, would love to see it expanded a little.

[Joel]

Very nice imagery. It kind of travels in all directions.

[Victor Makata]

I love the way you have written this poem. The beauty seeps out from every word. You are an awesome writer. Keep it up! :))

[Wintershade]

A solid, well-written poem. Loved the imagery.

[MFrano1]

This poem is good because it gives people new impressions each time they read it; since there's so much going on something new jumps out at you, creating different emotions. That takes talent, however it seems a bit too choppy in some areas, decreasing the effect of it. Maybe you could brush up a few lines or add a bit more? Either way it is still a good poem, so please don't take this the wrong way.

[DoormanDan]

This sent a chill down my spine. You wrote this perfectly. To be killed by being made into a statue would not be a fun way to go...

[Amulya Bhardwaj]

Loved the theme!! Well written!!

[sgheath]

Parts of it seem to flow, the last part. The rest feels broken, like it is missing something.