For My Son

Sweet little boy, you're daddy's joy.
I've watched with so much pride;
from your first cries and opened eyes,
to now, learning your stride.

I watch you sleep, so very deep,
your head upon my chest;
and guess your dreams; it often seems,
they are the very best.

Your giggles make my hard heart shake.
That laugh has teared my eye.
I'm sure you'll be a bit like me;
damned handsome, honest guy.

And as you grow and off you go,
to walk your winding trail;
the things you'll learn, oh god, I yearn
to listen to that tale.

Author's Note

"Doubledown Style 1 (or) Eights 'n Sixes"
Original form created by
Richard W. Jenkins
© 1 Apr 1987

Any number of 4-line verses about anything:
Aligned left or centered.

Syllable count per verse:
8/6/8/6

Rhyme scheme:
xxxaxxxa
xxxxxb
xxxcxxxc
xxxxxb

xxxdxxxd
xxxxxe
xxxfxxxf
xxxxxe

Etc...

Here is a link to his profile:
http://www.writerscafe.org/RichardJ
Aka Rascal on WC.

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

Heart warming words for your son. Brimful with love. Really touching read and reminded me of how I feel about my year old grandson, the only baby now in the family. Well done mattavelli. Kudos on attempting such a complicated structure. Not easy to do.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Christine! :)

[Chris Shaw]

You are welcome.

[Cassie]

I relate to this, parenthood is such a joy

[mattavelli]

Ya, Ive been enjoying it. Thanks for reading.

[Richard🖌]

Dear Matt,
You've honored me to the highest, not only for giving my form a try, but for composing it about you and your beautiful son.
How tender and sweet your words dance upon the page, right into my heart in perfect count, glorious wording, in a smoothly-flowing cadence, and spot-on rhymes, that epitomize your masterful wordcraft … I could not have composed it any better.

Big brotherly hugs of thanks to you and your very lucky Son … to have You as his Dad! ~ Richard

[mattavelli]

Hello, Richard.
What you've said means a great deal to me. I enjoyed your Eights 'n Sixes. thank you for sharing it with us. Matt