Sonnet For Regrets

In the Italian style

The moon does seem to mirror my regret,
with light that fails to brighten skies to day,
it cannot blot those stars, so far away;
those jewels I could not reach and can't forget.

And as the weak one in heaven's duet;
that pale comparison, shining so grey,
without the strength to forge it's own display,
those beams reflect resentment for my debt.

But should we ask the sun of jealousies
or failures through the years, when one's self-tasked;
I think we'll find regrets are not so rare,

when dreams to paint your face upon black seas
or glow with lovers on the nights they basked
are shattered by your own confounding glare.

Author's Note

Please let me know what you think.

Reviews

[William Michael Reeves]

Oooh! I really like this poem! Mixing celestial laws with emotional introspection. Now that I have a full understanding of meter I can appreciate the effort and skill necessary to write a poem as illuminated as this. Crepuscular light is enough when faced with self in the mirror.

Seems you resolved the octave by asking a question in the sestet, then answer, then qualify that assertion in the last half of the sestet.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Bill! :)
Ya, the turn comes with the sestet. Are you enjoying the form poetry?

[William Michael Reeves]

Writing sonnets hurts so good! A lot like sex. Just finished my first ballade yesterday. Almost as difficult. Richard's lessons, and his technique as a teacher, really illustrated what you had tried to help me understand way back. Meter, meter, meter! And then the punctuation! Such a satisfying pain in the brain.

You might get a kick out of the sonnet I wrote about Richard. Find 'Two Sonnets' on my second page now I think. The other one has some wordplay which might be a sonneteering no no. Advancing words. 'Once A Boulder' and 'Love Rings Fire' are recent. I have 3 cooling off in front of me now. Yes, I LOVE form poetry. Playing around with fusing different forms together too. The inspiration I found in your feedback is still in me. Thank you!

[Mari K]

Awe this is a beautiful piece of art! The flow was perfect and the feeling it was meant to invoke was there throughout. Bravo!!

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Mari K. :)

[dan]

Matt, This piece is utterly masterful. I've written sonnets before and they always seem to create questions in my mind whether or not I'm using the correct punctuation to keep the flow alive; you've done so perfectly. The rhyming work is spot on...the construction, wording and rhymes; everything is unbeatable. This is my third review I'm doing today and it's three in a row that I'm saving to my library favorites. I've never had a three-peat before. Thank you for your part of it! take care...dan

[mattavelli]

Thanks for the spot on your shelf, Dan. :)

[PaleWriter]

Incredible writing. The mark of a true poet.





100/100

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Palewriter. Woohoo, 100! :)

[PaleWriter]

You deserve it.

[sereenaoutloud]

This is beautiful .. You really take the reader on this journey of regret with you In this write
Brillant Matt! :)

[mattavelli]

Thanks Sereena. :)

[andrew mitchell]

I love the images you paint here in a interesting enjoyable read that read like a thriller in the way I got excited in it all! Nice!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Andrew. :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

So many beautiful phrases and thoughts you've spoken here.
A wonderful sonnet sir poet.

[mattavelli]

Thank you for reading it, ms. Pepperweb. :)

[Cherry Pepperweb]

It was my pleasure to read this one.

[marcus]

The King of Sonnets again has spoken! And regrets are for us all, to keep as token!

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Marcus. Do you have regrets?

[marcus]

I used to have a truckload of them, but I'm trying to let go, in my old age:)

[jeannemarie coulter]

a fine write...you drew me into your thoughts and then whisked me along to the end...thank you...

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Jeannemarie. :).

[Willard Wells]

Very nice. The first line "The moon does seem to mirror my regret," was my favorite line from this piece. Excellent word selection. Thanks,

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Willard. :)

[Emily]

Nice wording and meaning!!
Well done!
Keep it up!

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Emily.