Dinner With The Sun

There once was a monster who met a mouse
and they became great friends.
They would race and chase and dance around
and sometimes play pretend.

The monster, she would share her dreams.
The mouse would share his too.
So one day, when the pond dried up,
they knew what they should do.

They packed a breakfast and a lunch
and got ready to run;
thinking if they did their best,
they'd have dinner with the sun.

Reviews

[Poetic Beauty]

I love this mouse and beast tale. It has a bit of a child-like wonder to it

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Poet! :)

[Poetic Beauty]

You are most welcome

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

This is a wonderful story told in whimsical rhyme. If I had a child I would be reading this short tale because of the message of friendship it conveys is timeless. Well done my friend.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Carlos! :)

[Chris Shaw]

Cute poem mattavelli. I see this in a children's book with illustrations. Nicely rhyming stanzas and the lines flow well.

Chris

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Christine. I'm just airing out an older write. ;)

[Chris Shaw]

Good for you. That's what I have been doing lately as well :)

[Stella Armour]

lovely and light hearted Matt, sometimes that is just what we need to read :)

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Stella! :)

[john l smith]

I really like this type of poem and I enjoyed each word and line of this one.
Relates well to my simple mind.
fun to read and I am sure it was fun to write
Keep em coming

[mattavelli]

Thanks, john, it was a fun write. :)

[barleygirl]

Brilliant! Playful! Love this! Here I get the sensations of you as Dad, playing pretend with no inhibitions! This has a beautiful childlike aspect to it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Barleygirl! :)
It's definitely a story for children, silly and inspirational. Or maybe it's about my marriage. Haha
I like your new photo.

[barleygirl]

Thanks sweet friend *smile*

[Carol Cashes]

This is delightful, not a word I normally use.

Well done, clever mattavelli.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Carol! :)
You've delighted me.

[Roland Petrov]

I suppose the monster and the mouse got burned, but this reader definitely did not. Not only is it delightful and playful, but it also has a killer title.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Roland! :)

[Bacchus]

I'd love to see some illustrations with this one. Delightful and playful.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Bacchus. Playful and delightful was my goal. :)

[dan]

Matt, I'm not sure exactly what to say about this one (??). I know from reading so many of your writes that you don't employ rhyme all of the time, often opting for free verse instead. But this rhyme scheme is so well constructed...the pace, the meter, the rhythm...that reading it almost feels as if I'm dancing through the piece as I read. And the story? So endearing it should be in a children's book. In fact I am copy/pasting this one to a Word document and printing it out to read to my grandson when he's old enough to appreciate the characters and rhyme scheme (he just turned three, I don't think he'd fully appreciate it yet). EXTREMELY well done! take care...dan

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Dan, I did write this as a story for children(my son). I plan to illustrate a panel that tells the story. I'll have to show the story from right to left, to keep west on he left side. Haha. I think he would like it, maybe keep it on a wall for his kids.

[dan]

Sounds like a plan, Matt...good luck with it! take care...dan