Quick Thought

Short poem

There are no stains on this tattered edge of my mind,
where single strands fray out, leaving the pattern.
And as I cling to this bit of clarity, I'm swinging my legs, 
building up momentum in an attempt to rustle the curtain 
and let some light in.

Reviews

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Sounds like a poem about the confused mind.
Looking for clarity of thought and a little light to guide the way.

Interesting.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading, Dooley. :)
I'm easily confused.

[Scrap]

I like how you make something so short and simple so intriquing.

[mattavelli]

Thanks for reading! 😁

[Carolynn]

Really good poem - feels like your at the edge of something big :)

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Carolynn.:)
autocorrect does not like your name...

[Carolynn]

I know nn - what was my Mother thinking!?! Haha!

[Levi Levin]

Excellent message! Great job!

[mattavelli]

Thank you, John!

[Levi Levin]

Your welcome!

[Bo Lanier]

i like your poem, nicely written.

[mattavelli]

Thank you, Bo. :)

[Nico Reznick]

A real late-night epiphany feel to this. Atmospheric and intense.

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Nico. I wrote this while feeding lunch to my son. So it's a day time epiphany. Haha

[jeannemarie coulter]

intriguing view of a working mind in search of new light or new patterns to learn...well penned

[mattavelli]

Thanks, Jeannemarie :)

[Leo]

Insightful and electrifying! "strands fray " is a brilliant word mix. Well done!

[mattavelli]

Thank you, stranger.

[Leo]

haha it's Stanger ;) and you're welcome

[dan]

Matt, This write is masterful. Myself, I have never been able to master the art of the short poem, don't know why. I come to WC and read so many great examples of the art, but when I get an idea it usually goes at least 10 lines. "...I'm swinging my legs...to rustle the curtain and let some light in." That's a brilliant use of very vivid imagery, a perfect way to conclude your 'quick thought.' This goes straight into my library favorites. VERY well done! take care...dan

[mattavelli]

Hey, Dan, thanks for reading. This one was easy, no count or rhyme, hence the title. I'm glad you like it. :)

[dan]

Matt, Interesting thought you brought up. My writing used to be almost all with a rhyme scheme. But when I started writing with free verse instead I felt so liberated. With rhyming you may have an excellent idea for the next line, but you can't word it the way you imagined it because you cant make that thought rhyme, for whatever reason. Writing free verse allows one to write WHATEVER the inspired thought is, word for word. I'm not suggesting that what you should do; stick with your own way, because your writing is GREAT as is...just hatching a thought for you to digest. take care...dan

[mattavelli]

Sure. Writing is a hobby for me. I try out the different forms to keep it interesting. Thanks again. :)

[Valentine]

I like this write. I thought weaving the pattern in the second line, like it just the same. Valentine

[mattavelli]

Thanks, valentine.