Breathless

About a boy that find the magic in life even through all the dark aspects in life.

Breathless

I took a small step into the cold dark room of nothingness. The vast crevice of my only solemn heart. I sat on my porch step, perplexed by the awe inspiring design of the falling snow flakes. One single flake landed on my scarlet colored hair. Moving my eyes ever so slightly toward the lonely snowflake. I took a breathe, seeing all the twirls and swirls of such a magnificent spectacle. Its clear, translucent, blades took me by surprise. With internal quarrel and despair, such an innocent piece of nature had falling upon my poor unfortunate soul. The disparity of my heart to the reality of the world had gone astray. Like a piece of grass, my life may bend in the wind. It was at the mercy of cold fate. However, this snowflake was different. With the path of wind that engulfed it, its perfectly designed elegance was never argued. It was the individual quality of the plain spot of oblivion that souls wander endlessly .

Reviews

[Matthew James Ginn]

thanks alot yashmita^.^ That means alot coming from such a skilled writer like you

[yashmita13]

you writing is so fluent . it's amazing :D

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Its good to look at life in such a positive way.
To see things that don't mean much to others as something special.
To treasure life and the things in it.
This is an inspiring piece, if only it where that easy, and all of us could look at life in such a positive way.
Thanks for sharing :)

[Matthew James Ginn]

thank you so much xD

[cimmy wuv xxxooo]

Your welcome :)

[SheDragon16]

This is so Good and deep that I feel I should not even try too wrap my mind around it to give it a review.
I have no word's.

[Matthew James Ginn]

My message is whatever your soul decides to reveal.

[Cruz Niq]

First of all, very eloquently written. Love the romanticizing of a snowflake, and the contrast between it's innocent nature and the speakers inner(external?) conflict. It's vague enough to make one wonder if this is an issue of his mind or are they stepping into a void?
There was one grammar issue of note, it needs to be "breath" instead of "breathe".
Other than that, beautiful piece.

[Matthew James Ginn]

i saw that cx and thank you!!!

[brezybaby3]

wow! very deep stuff. I think you could expand it a little more and show us a little more of the darkness that he lives with, will make this even more meaningful. But it is excellent as it is

[Mlashi Khan]

its a quite catching narration of an oblivion.

[Matthew James Ginn]

a 1000 thanks for your insight!

[Sami Khalil]

A very, very good write. Like it all...:).......

[Matthew James Ginn]

thank you for the advice!

[Matthew James Ginn]

coming from you, Ill cherish that :p

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure. Any time...:)...................