Heaven's Rain

Your every single drop

cleanses, purifies and soaks

me in the deepest

pit of chalice -

my soul, my very being.

Pour down, down with

the frosty wind.

Pour down and wash away

this daub of sins.

For I erred,

I erred to the divinity,

to my fellow kin,

to nature,

to everything.

Stream down, stream

and quench this

curse of a man.

Stream and help me

cross the threshold

of cloud nine.

I have sinned countless

times - in this bittersweet

jaunt of life.

Now rain! Rain down

the valley of mortals,

for you are the guise

of His forgiveness.

Author's Note

Help me improve in writing poetry. Any review will be appreciated :-D

Reviews

[Konigin]

I like it! It spoke out! It has character! Good work friend.

[Mirra]

Thank you Chelsea :-D I'd like to read more of your works too but then again the internet is not working well right now, it's too slow.

[Konigin]

I'm sorry to hear that. My internet has been picky too! :)

[Sami Khalil]

Your every single drop

cleanse(s), purify( purifies) and soak(s)

me in the deepest

pit of chalice -

my soul, my very being.

Pour down, down with

the frosty wind.


A splendid poem. What to say...:)...............

[Mirra]

Edited it, didn't notice that. Thanks for the review. I really appreciate it :-D

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)...........

[Neeraj V Murali]

Well formed poem. I would say you have expressed it very well.... :)

A thumbs up from me! :)

[Mirra]

Thank you :-D Glad you like it.

[Free_Soul]

Knowing oneself is difficult and it takes immense courage to accept one's fault. Your poem speaks about millions of people who are stuck in their own miseries which were the resultant of their faults. Very well portrayed!

[Mirra]

Wow. Thank you very much for the review. I really appreciate it.