Candle

Life is a candle,
Burning bright and warm.
If it drops,
Fire will spread.
Life is a candle,
Melting slowly away.
A once beautiful flame
Dies away over night,
Leaving hardened wax behind.

Author's Note

I would love some input on this and all my poems good or bad I'm thirteen so I'd like all the help I can get

Reviews

[afra]

aaammmaaazziiinnggg ....lol ...my thumbs are up as you can see in my photo

[Monica]

This is a good write!

"Life is a candle,
Burning bright and warm.
If it drops,
Fire will spread."

...I like this part, it just shows how fragile like can be. Holding the candle steady is great and will light your way but, drop it, and everything can fall (burn) apart.
Great job! Keep writing!! :)

[None]

I love how you go back to "life is a candle" in the middle. It's so powerful. I think this is absolutely wonderful. Keep posting.

[Harley (arbiter)]

The comparison as Everyone says too is Great. Life IS a candle. And this IS a Great write. Lol BTW was this that assignment in English?

[Mazie Tackett]

Maaaayyyyybbbbeeeee............

[BillyGirl]

I like the comparison between life and a candle. Great poem :)

[Kimberly "Melody" Carne..]

very nice.

[mariah]

hey, good job! i like the comparison...i have never heard it before. very original! nice work :)
-mariah

[Mazie Tackett]

Thank you so much

[Priscilla Sayers]

The truth in these words spreads like the warmth of a candle into the heart of a poet. Nicely done!