Price Paid

You made me feel alive.
You gave me faith.
Then you went and made me cry.
Now I feel unsafe.

Look at what you did to me.
Look at what you've done.
Why can't you see
someone has to pay the price and I am that one.

All the love I gave you,
All the times I cared,
this is what you do
And the pain isn't even shared.

I'm the only one that pains
from what was shown.
You thought it was all fun and games.
I guess I was just a stepping stone.

I'm sick of what you put me through.
I should of guessed.
I should of knew.
To you I was just a pest.

To you I'm just another heart to break,
Another dream to crush,
Just another flake.
To you, I hate your stinking guts.

Author's Note

Very old poem like a year or two old

Reviews

[RachelReaper]

A very well written poem from like a year or two ago. If you ever go through again, my only advice is to never let them see your in pain, act just as indifferent as they are if they're the ones who had the nerve to break your heart.

[Jordan A. Wilson]

I like this one but the last line in the second stanza disrupted the flow for me.

[afra]

awwwww ..i love this one

[Laura Maidah]

Okay. Third line first stanza is really young IMHO. "Went and made me cry" sounds a little off to me. It's so powerful emotionally. I know it'll be tricky to change your diction on that line and keep the rhyme/meter. Think about it. "Why can't you see
someone has to pay the price and I am that one." That last line is great. What does "the pain isn't even shared mean"? Collective pain as a concept is pretty abstract, vague, and unclear here. "I should have.." for both lines in the second to last stanza. The last line is weird syntax. The inversion changes the meaning entirely. The rest of the last stanza is kind of genius. I can't write like that.

[babygirlz]

very violent feelings

[Harley (arbiter)]

Very emotional. Good write. But you shouldmt take you're pain out on others. Think of how you feel then think if you want others to feel the same.