To You

To you, the sky is falling.

To you, it's forever night.

To you, there is no savior.

To you, there is no light.

To you, my help is useless.

To you, the world is grey.

To you, no bodies listening.

To you, there is no play.

To you, things are dying.

To you, we've reached our dawn.

To you, the world is ending.

To you, we'll soon all be gone.

Your joy has long been dead.

Killed by a life of dismay.

But I would bear a million more.

Just to smile one more day.

Reviews

[Heather]

I enjoyed this peace very much.... I find that the way you wrote this, is very powerful!!

[Neon]

Once again a great piece i read in a day and loved much. The two words "To You" played here a great role. I read some stuffs and i got that you write in your cool rhyming way ... your stuffs're well written with your rhythm ... that's a great thing. I enjoyed reading this piece.

[icerhex]

Beautiful, very challenging poem. I must congradulate you on the constant rhythm that is kept, it's sometimes very difficult to do that in a poem.

[wonderful_wishes]

I love this. It is very beautiful.... I think this poem holds more power than many that i have read before....

[PaleWriter]

The world is what we make of it. This is a good example of that. Nice writing.

[rachael]

this was really beautiful! it flowed so well like the words were painted together. i loved it

[None]

I love this. It's totally a perspective on cynics. :) Great write. You nailed this one.

[bursting colors]

its kinda creepy but its something that keeps you reading

[babygirlz]

its intense i like it