The First Lesson

My first post for writers cafe

I guess somewhere between I and Miss
before forever was invited
there was some imbalance
like chemistry
we were missing that positive charge

You had me wrapped up in your science
and through compliance I was hoping to share more then
the atomic number of 8
that we'd be able to mediate
maybe meet in the middle and share some ionic bonds

But it seems like we weren't covalent
because what was taken from you and I
well, that would lead us to history
and to understand the present we'd have to study the past
and while you want to stay lost in pages
I'm more focused on writing them

Author's Note

I have been writing for a while, now just want to get it out there in front of as many eyes as possible.

Reviews

[Blue]

Your first post for WC? Wow. I remember my first post was an overly elementary scribble I dared to call 'poetry'. Haha. This is gooood. I like the integration of 'chemistry' and the terminologies I abhorred way back in high school resurfaced. Ha! I missed them, though.

Cleverly written, Matt. I like your writing style. Keep it up, man!

[Matthew Bosko]

Thank you Blue! It means a lot coming from such a great writer like yourself.

-Matt

[Blue]

Naah, you don't know me yet. It's to early to call me 'great'. :) Thanks, anyway.

[Colin Ricardo]

"and while you want to stay lost in pages
I'm more focused on writing them", I really like this line, it gives a good sense of moving on I think.

Also, "before forever was invited", is a lovely phrase, good stuff, keep it up.

[NITISH]

Nice correlation between Science and Love. Liked it very much. Keep it up :)

[Matthew Bosko]

Thank you!

[Ghost of Jupiter]

Well done... Love the link between science and love, because after all, isn't it chemistry that draws us near? That chemical magnetism...can't wait to read more of your work. :)

[Matthew Bosko]

Thank you so much K, glad you enjoyed it.

[ARH]

You have really nice word choice. I really liked this poem.

[Matthew Bosko]

Thank you!

[AnneliseAltman]

I liked the links you made between chemistry and the emotions involved. Especially liked the last line 'and while you want to stay lost in pages, i'm more focused on writing them' A lot can be read into this which is why I liked it.

[Matthew Bosko]

I'm glad you enjoyed it! :) Thank you!

[@zeewhykay]

Clever my friend !
I'm happy to see a well-worked piece and not necessarily a ''rushed out'' one.

Witty ending. Even if science and chemistry is not a personal favorite subject of mine, you had me interested throughout, drinking your words.
Well done. Looking forward to more !

[Matthew Bosko]

Thank you, Yann. I will ne honest, I was never good at anything science related...but that's part of the beauty of it. It equates to my true understand of a relationship now a days. So much has changed.

[kitty]

Haha that's clever! :D
EDIT: sorry, I would probably write a longer review, but after about 2 am my brain starts thinking very simply...

[Matthew Bosko]

Haha, thanks Kitty!

[Bluefire]

"and while you want to stay lost in pages
I'm more focused on writing them"
I like this one a lot.
Very well penned.
Clever! ^^

[Matthew Bosko]

Thank you BLUE! That means a lot.

[Bluefire]

No problem! ^^

[Bluefire]

Blurp~ Random link!
http://youtu.be/w2gFlXGdXBc
I just remembered this song re-reading this.

[Matthew Bosko]

I like this song, never heard it.

[Bluefire]

It's one of my favorites! *-*
Glad you like it!

[MsJewel]

Welcome to WC Matthew. Your poem is unique and clever. Truly a delight to read. I look forward to reading more by you.

:) Julie