A Heavy Heart

This poem originated as a prompt in my Creative Writing class and the goal was to write a poem about these 2 topics: Joy and graveyard.Rhyme scheme is based off of the one used in The Lady of Shallot.

Remember the summer winds that we gazed?

That rustling of the corn in the suns haze

Lost in it, lost in the vast maze

So in love were we, yes I felt that craze

In the home we built

When you left, for days I stared at the pyre

The abyss of grieving, I fell into a mire

These tears I felt, missing you, I did tire

For I have always loved you

 

And no amount of tears could bring you back

No more days we could walk along the track

Holding hands along the way with a pack

Gifting each other little trinkets within our sack

In the home we built

But no more these days I see you

On the gravestone I looked up and knew 

That I had lost one in a few

But my love, I've always loved you

 

When I first looked upon you, I could only sigh

So in love was I, that I did not want to try

For fear of rejection, then wallow and cry

All because my love reached the very sky

Long before the home we built

I now long for the days when we both were a flower

Our love made leaps and bounds; giving us power

And the taste of that peace, never would it founder

Because I always loved you

 

As the years went by, I knew happiness and pleasure

With you my angel, I cherished every moment together

And we loved with a love that would even defy the weather

For every chance I had, I knew time was a treasure

All in the home we built

Even when tragedy struck, and you were confined to a bed

"I will never give up on you", that's what I said

And we prayed for cure that was neither there or read

Slowly you began to wither, slowly you came to be dead

At night I sobbed, for I always loved you

 

But like a child, I would suffer any toll

For you were my everything, my love, my soul

Being the best I could be, that was my goal

And only you could make me whole

Always so in the home we built

And now you are gone, I must finally begin to start

To move on and live, but know that it gives me a heavy heart

Our path as one has diverged and I have to depart

But I will always love you

Author's Note

Should I keep the repetition, Should I add another stanza to add more emotion, Are any of the rhymes really forced

Reviews

[Annelise]

I think this is lovely. I don't think the repitition is needed through out, you have a wonderful flow with out it. However, I never really rhyme so you might not want to put much worth in my review of the rhyming. I think it is so achingly melancholy.

[Abirami]

Beautiful write! Brings out the feeling of loss and love in a artistic manner.Well done!!