The Spirit

I can see the cracks,

the spirit living over the skin.

Bulletproof but feeling the cold,

worn and lined, a sad grey it shivers.

Like a walking body of glass,

it treads around eggshells,

hovering on the breeze,

and treads light on dark realms.

Protected by lies, their blanket of trust,

it's place in nature, lost and forgotten.

It covers you, and I smell it's scent,

I see the cracks, the lines in your spirit.

Reviews

[Clouded in Hopeful Illu..]

I enjoy the mysterious tone of this piece – as if the reader never really knows what the spirit really is. It could be a number of things, including the literal spirit of a person. That’s one great thing about poetry is that everyone can interpret the words to what works for them the most depending on their situation and their lives. For this piece, I think it would do wonders for you to expand it and take full advantage of using all five senses to engage your readers. Seeing the cracks – what do the cracks look like. Feeling the cold – what does it feel like. Smelling the scent – what does it smell like. I think this piece could really transport it’s reader to another realm given some work.

+YourMidnightSecret+

[Sunny]

I like this. Its different from other writing. :)

[Ruth]

What a brilliant piece! Outstanding...shall be thinking on this for a while, enjoyed :) xo

[#SecretWriter]

Hey thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it, feedback is always welcome and definitely appreciated :) x

[Pryde Foltz]

Protected by lies, their blanket of trust,
it's place in nature, lost and forgotten.
It covers you, and I smell it's scent,
I see the cracks, the lines in your spirit.

I do believe just about everyone indulges in facade to one extent or another. If your interested I wrote a related poem.
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=QWKOKjsMCJk

[#SecretWriter]

As usual, thanks for taking the time to read and I hope you enjoyed it. Will be checking out your work soon :)

[Madison O'Dwyer]

What a concluding line! Striking, ethereal, simple and yet very deep.
I very much enjoyed this poem.
Thanks for sharing!

[#SecretWriter]

Thanks for reading and commenting, I hope you enjoyed it and hope to hear from you again x

[Sam]

Finally, a read request worth reading today. And it is most certainly deep.

[#SecretWriter]

Thank you, glad you enjoyed it

[Baby Ricochet]

I like this. It's kind of depressing and creepy at the same time. Good poem

[#SecretWriter]

There was definitely a depressing side to this, thanks for taking the time

[TL Boehm]

oh this is eloquent and deep writing. to see the cracks in a spirit takes a sharp eye. Well penned

[#SecretWriter]

Thank you so much for reading, always great to hear nice feed back :)