Watch me. (some of it mine)

This silence keeps you safe for a moment,
As you're walking away,
your foot steps get louder...stomping away,
All you needed was time,
now your time will destroy us.

Soon it will be over, Here we are stuck inside this hated world,
You pierce my lungs and my body goes numb,
As my colors fade away,
You watch me bleed.
 

But I die with a smile,
All you wanted was to live for a little while,
You took everything but I left you empty,
You can't replace me, you can never.

Reviews

[Michael Jewel Davis]

Nice poem, I really liked it and your style.

[Jen Marks]

I really like the line: "You took everything but I left you empty."
Also, I like how you connected death with colours fading away.
Nicely done! :)

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