true bliss

The sweet air around me, holds me tight and leaves me warm.

My stomach says yes, but my body says no,

Whatever shall I do.

 He loves me, he loves me not...

Reviews

[Ashira Macy]

I beautiful little thought process, almost prose like. Well done, it was very relatable.

[SquinklaPsyOps]

Your writing style brings it all together very nicely.

Will definitely read it again.

[John Stussy]

Not bad, it's an eloquent poem for as short as it is. In my opinion, however, it's a bit generic in its bareness. I think a bit more could definitely be added to this. You've got a good start.

[Edward Lancheister]

short but straight to the point. keep it up

[Justin]

that was really good :) it is a great story :)

[Chloe_Spence]

Beautiful poem, Angelove :)

I most certainly like your username as well :)

[Meghan's Gramma]

This really sets me thinking. Why "stomach" says yes? I somehow think of the heart as "other than the body", but the stomach as part of. Unless you are speaking, metaphorically, of a visceral experiencing?

The one line explanation is a great punch line.

[Pól]

Life is full of dilemmas!!

[ron]

Trust your instincts and your heart will follow.

[Antoñyo]

I like this. A true-hearted, relatable moment in time captured to perfection.
Possibly, the beginning of a lasting memory of the first time...

Thanks for the (100/100) share