Karma blackout poetry

Cure for temporary aimlessness.

Misused trust keeps you on pins and needles;
tolerable boiling point

My choice- I'm a victim, a master;
the Brahma who authored spirituality and writes post- truth

The antagonist is a teacher
The meek soul whose trust 
(was abused independence) 

See it as a curse
a blessing to an enemy

See past as predetermined present

As to karma, I have this response*

 

Author's Note

'Coz 30 minutes pre- clocking out is a Chinese Water Torture.

Reviews

[akihsna]

I could feel the poignancy of each and ever word :)

[GunMetal]

"The antagonist is a teacher" this line immediately made me think of Professor Moriarty.
I admit that I'm having some trouble figuring out where this is coming from, or what it's saying exactly, though it kinda reminds me of how sometimes those who achieve greatness become trapped by their own success.
I like how you ended it. Like an inhale.

[Amelie]

Well to be honest, so am I... I had some apprehensions as to where this poem might be leading but I'm glad it somehow delivered. It's more of a self re-evaluation; if you have pointed out the contradictory voice and the series of unresolved rebuttals. Writing this is somewhat new to me and of course,thank you.

[GunMetal]

That's ok, sometimes the words just want to be written whether they're in their right minds or not. I write stuff like that all the time. And then I Frankenstein that s**t into other poems =P

[Amelie]

I thought that was my method all along.ha! hadn't known. I enjoyed trying on new stuff lately and I guess this is the "eclectic" part I've been waiting to get into me.

[GunMetal]

"Off the wall" is encouraged in my book. But only in the unabridged version.

[Amelie]

and THAT was definitely "off-the-wall".

[GunMetal]

So is my hat :)

[Pax]

See past as predetermined present
~you amaze me with your words...i like this..
great work!

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlande..]

this reminds me of a snake eating its tail that I saw inside an obelisk in Turkey once, which was pointing at Atlantis {and I mistakenly blamed the wind}.

and also, I see what you did there. brilliant

[Amelie]

you said it. how frightening our untapped blunt motives can get. I, too have high tendencies to self- choke, lest we are all capable of. thanks budd

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

but you're tapping, and in a rhythm or control and release, that can be a very liberating and powerful thing, and you're welcome

[Amelie]

Yes it is currently in good shape and sure is liberating. wait, wait. I have something to tell you about my occasional colloquial dyslexia! something funny, you reminded me of it just now.

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

well I sent you a trivia email so send me that back in an email :p

[Amelie]

I'll sneek it in at work. haha it was fairly funny and embarrassing :|

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

that's always a great combo, like a cartoon with Thor against a fly

[Shmoke-Sifted Heftlander]

we have some weird conversations, :)