Jagged Rock

Circa 2011

My heart might burst from my very chest

     or break a rib or two

      at best

Tattered

Rattled

Tossed about

A rock on the beach

withered

under weather

Becomes smooth and fine

polished and shines

flawless at the end of time

But now

in this moment

my heart might burst from my very chest

      or break a rib or two

       at best

Reviews

[mcceewrites]

Mel, I enjoyed reading this and loved the lines "becomes smooth and fine... flawless at the end of time" because it makes me think of people. We go through so much and hope to come out better, "flawless" from our trauma or life lessons! Thanks for sharing.

[mel]

That's exactly the message I was trying to share! Great minds think alike haha

[Chris]

I wonder of the intended accompanying sounds and the weaving of the melody.

[becca]

I really like the flow of this poem combined with the writing placement among the overall message. I like the idea of the rock smoothing to become "perfect".

[mel]

Thank you! I really appreciate the review and compliment!!