I Love Him

For the one you love

I love him, whats not to love

his laugh is a drug i cannot go without

his voice is the light at the end of the tunnel

he is perfect

his hair falls perfectly across his face

his hands i cannot feel

but i know there soft to the touch

his music blares but that's OK

because

I Love Him

Reviews

[ron]

This is beautiful. I guess you love him with all you heart. sighs...
You have penned you love for him very well.

[?]

Michael, that a fantastic poem, and i think again, they will love you the way you love them....and im sad you guys cant be together....and hey guy i don't know who you are or who you think you are but you can back off and die in a hole cuz Michael s writing is perfect and its so good he doesn't need to give a s#!t about his grammar, so you can go suck a butt!

[NoelHC]

Nicely penned, and expresses that love you have so well.

I did notice a number of small punctuation and grammar errors that take away from the reader's enjoyment. I suggest you could change it to read as I have corrected below. This is intended in the spirit of helping a new writer put their best look out there. I would have capitalized the start of each line as well, but that may be not what you had in mind.

I love him, what's not to love
his laugh is a drug I cannot go without
his voice is the light at the end of the tunnel
he is perfect
his hair falls perfectly across his face
his hands I cannot feel
but I know they're soft to the touch
his music blares but that's OK
because
I Love Him