Creating a monster

This is the first chapter of a story that I am planning to write.

It was mid December around seventeenth or eighteenth. I remember that day very clearly. Although the details have became a little murky but her face still stays clear in front of my eyes. I guess I was a little amateur at that time but then again maybe I am still not mature enough, at least that's what my family and friends used to tell me. It all began with one smile. With just one little smile. Still I wonder what would have happened if that smile was not there.  First time when i saw her, she was sitting on the roof reading some magazine. Her hairs were moving with the wind as if angels were trying to touch her skin while her hands were trying to stop them from coming in front of her eyes. And her eyes, her eyes eyes were glittering with intelligence and a little mischief. The color of her eyes was blue like the sea. But there was something else in her eyes. There was hint of something scary like a monster who is being held back just waiting to be released. For some strange reason watching her eyes send shiver through my spine. I was a little scared of her but at the same time was being held hostage by her beauty. She was a like a goddess setting a trap for mortals to fall victim to love.  After starring for her nearly five minutes she suddenly realized someone was starring at her. She looked up and caught me looking at her. She told me latter that the look on my face was kind of cute and pathetic like a child watching a really expensive toy that he can not buy. But that happened latter, at that time she just looked at me got up and started walking towards the stairs. I was really ashamed. I could have felt my ears burning. She came near to me and stopped in her tracks. I looked at her and she starred me with a little anger. I was about to apologize when her lips formed a smile. And that was the first time I saw her smile. I was in awe and shock. It was like watching perfection.  At that very moment my heart skipped a beat and that moment was captured in my mind as the most beautiful moment of my whole life.  Her smile changed into a laugh. She laughed so much that tears started coming out of her eyes. I was really confused now. I thought what is she laughing about. Finally she got a hold on herself looked at me and said ,"I am sorry but this is very funny. You are behaving like you have been caught stealing or something. Relax it's all right. But for the next time remember that it is rude to stare."  I realized that it was time for me to apologize.  "I am sorry." She looked at me and smiled again.  "it's all right we all make mistakes at least you have the courage to realize you were wrong. Besides I can see that you are really sorry, so no harm done." I managed to smile a little uncomfortably.  She extended her hand towards me. I just starred at her.  She giggled and then said ,"you are suppose to shake my hand." This is not happening to me, I thought after realizing the damn ears were again burning.  "I am sorry I was just thinking about something else." "Like, she is very beautiful?", she asked in a matter of fact tone.  I was thinking the exact same thing but I was not going to tell her that.  "My name is Talah. I am new here. My family has just shifted in flat downstairs."  I said while shaking her hand.  "I know my father is the owner of this building". She replied.  "By the way my name is Kiran. I am doing bachelors in computer science. Do you do anything else then starring girls?" Now I decided to call it a day I had my share of embracement for the day.  "I am studying for matriculation exams." "Aren't you a little old for matric?" Okay now I was really annoyed. Holding back my anger I replied ,"yes I am I was sick and was not able to appear twice......" "what was the disease?" I was caught off guard with this question.  "I was suffering from measles." "Both times?", she asked.  "Yes, why is there a rule that you can not suffer from measles twice in your life?" Straight away I realized my mistake. She was giggling again.  "I do not know. But the doctors say that you can only suffer from measles once in your whole life." "okay I failed so what? Please hold your interrogation about my history cause I have to help in the shifting." I started to walk but she held my arm. I stopped and looked at her.  "I am sorry Talah, I was just having fun. But I am sorry if I was mean".  Her face was emotionless.  "Yes you were a little. But it's all right." She smiled a little.  "I hope we can still be friends." And I made the worst decision of my life at that very moment.  "I guess we are."   <--------------------/End of chapter one/------------------------>

Author's Note

This is my first story. It's not complete, it's just the first chapter. Please please please do tell me how you like it. Or how you don't.

Reviews

[PokemonFan#1]

I liked this so far. There were a few mistakes in this. In the beginning of the story, you put the word eyes in two times in a row. You also spelled later with two l's. its spelled with one l. But out of all of this, I love it! Keep it up.