Shooting Star

On a cold clear night with a million stars
I watched one streak the sky
A flickering sprite shooting straight past Mars
grew bold to catch my eye

 

For a moment of time this life burned bright
and held my solemn gaze
It was soon devoured with no trail in sight
and left me in a haze

 

Then this impatient star that streaked the night -
gave thought along my way
Some orbs shine still while yet others take flight
each, with its role to play

 

We live out our lives much like a star
moving throughout the day
Pulled by hidden forces both near and far
we're changed along the way

 

Some will stay put and give a guiding light
for everyone to see
Others will shoot out far and blaze from sight
being burned by breaking free

Reviews

[James K. Blaylock]

So true, so true...

jkb

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Nice dichotomy of character explored with the use of the shooting star as your main imagery. Nicely done. I believe 'roll' should be spelled 'role'. Great work. Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Constance]

Every time I read something of yours I had yet to read, I find one that I call a new favorite. This one evokes a powerful sentiment, a life lesson learned, while at the same time creating beautiful imagery in its metaphors. Nicely done, of course. Bravo!

[Ray Hamilton]

You paint a clear picture with this one
Enjoyed Ray { Not a Poet }

[Polly Lewis]

I love the analogy here and the imagery is so vibrant. For me this is what poetry is all about, an uplifting journey through heart and mind.

Beautifully done.

[Angel Bird]

A beautiful piece.

A magnificent in words comparison to human lives. You dare to compare humans with a univers full of wisdom and greatness - and you do it in a grandiloquent manner and create marvelous pictures to the reader's inner eye.

Brilliant work!

[shadadakiya]

that is very beautiful life is like a shooting star it goes by fast and in a blink of an eye and for the eyes can never see were it all end up at in the end we can only hope that it will take us to a place were love will never end

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A wonderful analogy of people's lives and fates with that of the stars. Beautiful imagery in a well written poem. Thank you for sharing