Pearls

Evey woman should have a string of pearls.

You wear around your neckline
a lucid strand of pearls
but to think they hold your beauty -
an error made by girls

 

Pearls do complement the woman
everyone knows it's true
but yet something more goes on
beyond what pearls can do

 

See, a pearl can only focus
the charms you keep inside
yes, the woman is the secret
the pearls bring out with pride

 

For a pearl alone is nothing
just some small piece of grit
they only enhance the beauty
that's there before they're fit

 

So wear these pearls on the evenings
and look your very best
but the beauty lies within you
it matters not to how you're dressed!

Reviews

[Constance]

What a sweet poem to give to your niece! I love the sentiment, and the natural flow you've given this.
I do see some things you might want to look at though... (almost afraid to say anything because it's such a personal piece, but I will)
Compliment is misspelled in the second stanza. In the fourth, the pearl changes from singular to plural- It would sound more grammatically correct like this: For pearls alone are nothing/ but small pieces of grit... or something along those lines to keep the pearl or pearls singular or plural all through the stanza. Then the "to" in the last line- just doesn't quite seem to fit. It makes the line seem off a bit... that's all I noticed. You must have posted this hastily. It's not like you to post something that isn't so achingly perfect I am left with little to say but "that's great", and this one is too in spite of a couple of little grammar flaws. Nicely done, Michael. I bet she loves the pearls, too. :)

[Fran Marie]

Pearls are so sophicated and have a charm all their own~ delicate gems holding the mysteries of the sea within~ I own several strings of them myself~ Your poem is so well penned~ a lovely gift
to give your niece~Fran Marie

[lauren emily]

I love this poem. It's so beautiful! Great job.

~Lauren

[Sarah B.]

i love this poem...and i love pearls they give off an aura of elegance diamonds can't relate to

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

What a beautiful gift both the pearls and this delightful poem. You are right - I am certain your niece's stunning soul shines out through her new necklace. What a wonderful and thoughtful uncle you are.
Thank you.
Light,
Siddartha

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very sweet beautiful poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah