Storm Clouds

We all need to keep a weather eye out, no telling where a storm can come from.

 

All the sailor's know the warning
of a red-tinged sunrise morning
Storm clouds are on the bay

Just as Sally knew the forming
as his rage began its swarming
Storm clouds again today

Others see something pleasing
and rebuff the ocean's teasing
Storm clouds are on the way

And they said she was mistaken
no beast was there to awaken
Storm clouds they do embrace

But sailor's know their business
as time has oft made them witness
Storm clouds that run their race

To her the truth couldn't be clearer
as she looked into the mirror -
Storm clouds upon her face

The sailor knows to dodge the squall
that morning foretells with its call
Storm clouds then pass them by

Sally was left to take the fall
when truth was denied by us all
Storm clouds then let her die

Troubles in life they take all forms
so listen well when told of storms
Storm clouds never lie

Reviews

[David Lewis Paget]

I like this abstract expression of violence in the home; it gets one thinking, and the use of simile is very apt.
I think the rhyme is a little forced in places, such as 'forming/swarming', and the line 'Storm clouds they do embrace' could have been better. But overall, quite an original little piece which, with a little editing, could become so much more.

[Valentine]

Being a victim of spouse abuse that left me disabled..I can see the truth in this, but not all of the storms come up with a warning. Some come in the dark of night during peaceful sleep..Believe me I know..God bless..Valentine

[J. James Reider]

The stark reality of this is shocking. You really wrote and eye opening poem here. A great way to draw attention to a problem that is most often swept under a rug. Terrific job!