G.U.I.L.T.Y

Just an acrostic poem I wrote right now...my impromptu confession

 Grim, greedy, that’s what I am inside.

Under my endless lies, that’s where I hide.

I never deserved to have you at all,

Let alone you catching me whenever I fall.

Torment, hatred is what I always feel inside.

Yet you always consoled me whenever I cried.

 

So now you know; would you still hold me now?

Or would you let me be, with my shame all around?

Under my shattered dreams is where I pretend I’m still alive.

Let alone continue my futile struggle to survive.

Reviews

[Drake]

drake

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

This is a nice poem. I like the barrage of emotions. I see a person desperately
trying to hold on to their ego. You should start a band with poetry like this.

[Blue tailed kite]

Beautiful poem.... love the flow of emotions... its so straightforward and yet meaningful....very nice

[Jasiel Moreira]

Nice work! Good structure and flow. Excellent piece

[odhiambo]

feels like a scribble that makes sense.good work

[ebur™]

such a beautiful acrostic poem. its just so deep and meaningful, it made me want to look at it again, thank you for sharing this poem. awesome job! :)

[Katie]

Ah! This is such an awesome piece. The flow and the emotion is amazing..

"I never deserved to have you at all..."

You are really talented.

[Anne Shirley]

That reminds me of God. Even thought we don't deserve to be loved by Him, He still loved us.
And whats more is that He died for us, to save us, to free us from hatred or from fear.
He is reaching out on us, but sometimes we reject Him, It's either we think lowly of ourselves or we think highly of ourselves that sometimes we think that He is just a myth.

[Flowetic Soulchild]

Great piece... wonderful expression of soul...