Hey Baby I'm Back

Hey baby your back

Didn’t think you would be

You after what you did

I was that girl that stayed in the corner

You were the jock that everyone loved

You ignored me for 2 years in high school

But 2 days into our third year you came to me

Became my  friend

Then one night we were hangin out

Havin fun drinking under age

Got alittle drunk

But I was fine not to drunk

You told me I was pretty

That my eyes shined  like a starry night

Then you kissed me but to far

I screamed and pleaded for you to stop

You slaped me

Told me to shutup

Then you were done called me names

I sat there crying with me skirt turn open

Said I was bet between you and your friends

Said I was nothing that you won the bet

Then you left never to be seen for a long time

But now hey baby your back  

I know you see me

That’s why you left so you wouldn’t have to

Well hey baby Im back

Reviews

[Alice]

I'm not much good at reviewing poetry as I am not a poet myself, but I did like the narrative feel to this. Perhaps, though, it would work better as a story? The structure of it as a poem is quite loose and I just get the feeling that it might work better as prose.

[Mary]

i liked it, i like how yor beggining and ending lines tie it up, by saying their both back. This had a nice story feel to it and a good message! Keep it up:)