My heart says so

Your essence sends my walls crumbling
Trying to find ground, but I'm stumbling
An angel fallen and lost its way
What can I do to make you stay
Take the wheel, lower your shield
With love all can be healed

A siren call breaks the night
Something about you feels so right
It's what I want, try letting go          
I Think It's meant to be baby
My heart says so

I can tell you've  being hurt
I See it in the way you flirt
A pure soul, so gentle and kind
Something I thought I'd never find 
Thought I'd turned the page on your broken heart
You Run and hide to avoid cupids darts

A siren call breaks the night
Something about you feels so right
It's what I want, try letting go          
Think It's meant to be baby
My heart says so
 
I let you see the other side
The one that I always hide
Shown you the world through my eyes
The mask i wear is my disguise
I Never let anyone in this deep
Though it seems it's not to keep

A siren call breaks the night
Something about you feels so right
It's what I want, try letting go          
Think It's meant to be baby
My heart says so

I'm not going to rush you
I'll take a place in your que
You're  the one shifting the gears
You choose, far or near
Take the risk, try changing lanes
I promise never to cause you pain

Think it's meant to be baby
My heart says so

Reviews

[Heather N]

I read this with the feeling that it could be or is a ballad. while a poem I imagined the author singing this to the reader (lover). It is a wonderful piece, I agree with the others that your diction and rhythm is wonderful. It is a very powerful piece, very clear and full of emotion. I very much enjoyed the opening stanza, it is my favorite.

A truly lovely piece.
-h

[Millzy86]

Thank you. I wrote it as a song so yes definitely a ballad. Thanks for the review

[Hailey Juliet]

I love the emotion of this piece as well as the language you use. Very well written! Thanks for sharing:)

[@JenniferNicholeAuthor]

I like the use of language and your vocabulary is very promising. ;)

[Gee]

Enjoyed the read, but for me, if all verses were the same length, the flow would improve a little, perhaps. That aside a good poem

[Diane]

Bravo! This poem really takes your emotions on a roller coaster ride.

[Bear]

Critique: (It's what i want, try let go) what I want - i should be capitalized in all three times you use this sentence in your poem also, it should be "try letting go" in all three sentences.
(The mask i wear is my disguise) mask I wear
(Turned the page on your broke heart) broken heart

Review: Very nice rhyme scheme and choice of words, strong emotional and sentimental imagery that warms the heart as it's read, good moral and inspiring message. Well done, I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Millzy86]

These were typos as originally were capitalized and spelt right

[richieb]

A poem of longing and desire. You express the wants and needs of a lover very well. A heart crying in the night to be received. Very well done.
Richie