Unexplainable light

I tried writing a poem about him but it somehow ended up like this..

And if I could write a poem 

on how your oceans would rest

under my sleep every night

and remind me of your power

and light 

I would, but I don't know how yet 

If I could describe your skies

your wonderfully coloured skies

and how they carry me 

into a world closer to yours

and remind me of your 

unfathomable beauty

then I would, but I don't know how yet

If I could write a story

about your wisdom

and power

and how they can create a galaxy

inside one's heart

then I would, but I don't know how yet

Because even If I know enough words

and I collide all the oceans

and galaxies and planets

I would never be able 

to describe such superpower

that many seem to forget about

while living on the ground

of your light 

Author's Note

it's not that good but i had to write something to prevent a panic attack

Reviews

[Daydreamer]

Superb portray of the fascination of a lover by his partner. I love your state of mind 💘
and, it IS that good! Stop writing that,Mirna :(
you're upsetting me now!💔

[Mirna]

this is so sweet! thank you so much :) and ok i'll stop for you haha xxxx

[MAC]

I believe this to be a terrific write. unique and well structured.

[Mirna]

thank you so much :)

[Lobster Goldberg]

I think it is rather good :) but I get the need to write for the purpose of release.

[Mirna]

thank you!!! :)

[Augustus]

I like the progression of thought. I like the repetition at the beginning of each stanza. In fact the general form, and in part the subject matter is remarkably similar to a recent poem of mine called "Aurora". There is a level of grandeur and elegance in your words, which elevates the poem to a higher level. Given what you achieved with the first three stanzas, the last one was a bit of an anticlimax. It sounded somewhat muddled and confused. This poem is very very strong three quarters of the way, so it needs a finish that at least matches up to that level, if it doesn't surpass it. Finishing well matters. Otherwise, I enjoyed it a lot.

[Mirna]

first of all, thank you so much for this lovely review I really appreciate it. I wrote this poem late at night and so I didn't expect it to be that good but I just posted it to have more courage in sharing my work even when they're not greatly done. I was also having trouble explaining God as the poem explains but ya that's pretty much it. Again, thank you so much:) it means alot.

[Augustus]

You're most welcome :)

[LL]

I truly enjoyed this piece of poetry. You did a FANTASTIC job! This type is my favorite to read. 100/100

[Mirna]

thank you so much:) I'm glad you liked it x

[ron]

You say "I would, but I don't know how yet." You did in so many ways. You take the heart and make it feel close to you. This is what a romantic poem does...at least that's what I think. A very beautiful write Mirna.

[Mirna]

Thank you so much ron. I never put myself to that level but it really brightens my day seeing comments like this, so thank you. :)

[ron]

You are most welcome Mirna. thank you or sharing.

[Sami Khalil]

A splendid read and write Mirna. Thank you for sharing...:)

[Mirna]

Thank you for taking your time to read, it means a lot:)

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)

[Lydia Shutter]

Oh, I think you do know how because you just did. The honest romantic nature of this poem is so charming. Lydi**

[Mirna]

thank you so much Lydia:) I really appreciate it.

[Echoes of Eros]

You create such a feeling of vastness and mingle it so beautifully with an intimacy of the soul. And to read your note, to see the source from which this flowed, that stirs the mind and heart as well. How I hope you found an overwhelming peace in your poetic confessions, Mirna. xo

[Mirna]

it really makes my day reading such a lovely review on something I've never had the courage to post online, so thank you, so much. It means alot :)

[Echoes of Eros]

I deeply appreciate your inspiration and the courage to share it, Mirna. :)

[Mirna]

It's all down to these great comments which inspire me to share more. Again, it means alot. thank you:)

[00000000000000000000000..]

I thought it was really good myself Mirna, Your title put me in a memory long ago that happen. Everything spoken was spiritual felt to me within your poem:) Thank You for sharing btw those attacks are never fun thank God they don't happen anymore.

[Mirna]

thank you so much jon:) I really appreciate it.

[0000000000000000000000000000]

Your very welcome:) Good morning btw:)

[Mirna]

it's currently the afternoon where I live but, good morning to you too haha:)

[0000000000000000000000000000]

and good afternoon to you ha ha