Rain is Like a Fog

 

Like a Japanese monsoon it comes.

I’m the 80 year old grandma

With black umbrella

That’s not staying dry.

I feel the wind starting up stronger.

On the dock I stand,

Watching the water rise.

The storm is here.

Rain is like a fog,

Hiding the Japan Alps

On the other side of the lake.

 

Seeing her gently touch

The back of his neck

Rushes it over me

Like a Japanese monsoon.

Reviews

[Mokey]

Fantastic. Really captures that feeling! Amazing job -- especially with creating two different characters, one metaphoric, to express the emotion.